Organ Donor Draft Speech

Lachy Wallis was a hyperactive and cricket loving boy who was just eight years old but weeks from dying. If he did not receive a liver transplant soon he would die and his own father was being tested as a live liver donor. Then the call came that an liver donor had been found and Lachy would be able to go into an operation very soon. The news was perfect and within a few short weeks his life was saved.


Every year on average 740 recipients are saved by organ and tissue donations.Their life stories are still being written instead of being cut short. I have come to persuade you today that everybody in this room must become an organ donor.The demand for organs significantly surpasses the number of donors everywhere in the world.There are more potential recipients on waiting lists than organ donors, and sadly on average every year 100 people lose their lives because they do not receive an organ or tissue. But there are also many lives who are saved every year thanks to the selfless donations such as eight year old Lachy Wallis who was given a liver which saved his life.


 Organ and tissue donations saves lives every year and Lachy Wallis' story is one of many.
And it is not only the recipients of the organs and tissues but it is also the donors of these precious gifts that have amazing stories to tell. 


Many people have doubts about organ donation but don't let your religious views prevent you from doing what you know is right, problems that occur within organ donations can be stopped by you. 


In conclusion becoming an organ donor is the most vital thing to do as it saves many lives every year.

Reasons for being an Organ Donor

People should become organ donors as it saves many lives every year like people such as Lachy Wallis, Tony, Julie Kenett were saved by an organ donor. These stories that people have written shows the amazing people who have become organ donors to save other peoples lives:
http://www.donatelife.gov.au/Discover/Stories-of-hope.html

I have found many useful statistics on this website:
http://www.donatelife.gov.au/Discover/Facts-and-Statistics.html

There are many religious viewpoints about being an organ donor.
http://channelnine.ninemsn.com.au/article.aspx?id=300372
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Organ_donors#Organ_shortfall

Modality- High and Low within a Speech

Modality applies to my speech because if I was to have high modality through out my speech it would make me look and sound enthusiastic about the topic that I have chosen and the side I have taken. Having high modality means that I believe strongly about the side I have taken on the topics I have chosen by using words such as "must" and "always" to say my point of view. But if I were to have low modality this would mean that I would be more tentative within my speech by using words such as "may" and "could". These words show that I am not very certain about the side I have taken and the argument that I am imposing.

English Assignment: 3 Topics- Dot Points

Becoming an Organ Donor-

• You should become an organ donar
• Saves a life
• Helps someone in need
• Makes you feel good about yourself as you helped another person in a big way
• Your donation could help a loved one live longer
• If you die it would not matter to donate some of your organs to people who would need it more.

Are zoos still relevant for animal preservation-

• Yes
• Helps breed endangered species in a calm location
• There are zoo keepers caring for the animals 24/7 which makes sure they are healthy everyday
• Many tourists will be able to know more information on animals to help protect them

Primary School Children Should Be Banned From Chatrooms-

• Are too immature 
• They do not no the rules and knowledge about 'online predators'
• They do not need chatrooms as they see their friends everyday
• They should be banned from chatrooms

Nature of Task- Speaking Assessment

Nature of Task:


Persuasive texts are designed to position a point of view(opinion - thesis). 


Texts that successfully persuade are usually highly emotive (emotional words + influence listener/audience emotions) and effectively balance opinions with facts (research- logos).


Persuasive texts can make sweeping generalisations (uniformed conclusion), rely on stereotypes and hyperbole and yet still seem credible.


This is because a combination of objective (facts) and subjective (opinion) information is usually used to persuade.


Careful use of repetition and high modality words(persuasion techniques) can emphatically convey the composer’s purpose if it is counterbalanced with the use of statistics, expert evidence and product/idea endorsement from authoritative sources(ethos)(objective).


Moreover, effective incorporation of anecdotes(personal story), analogies (comparison) and inclusive language (we, us, ours - include the audience) (techniques) can personalise the message and help connect the composer and their text with its audience.

CAS Swimming Carnival

Knox vs Trinity is one of the greatest CAS swimming rivalries any competition has seen. Knox and Trinity have been fighting it our with their blood, sweat and tears against each other for the prestigious CAS Cup for many decades. For too long has the Cup been in Trinity's possession, for too long have Knox boys put in all their effort but fallen short on the day and for too long Knox has been in second place. Although I remember a time when Knox would win the Cup and hold glory over Trinity but that was a long time ago.

Boys we come together once a year for the greatest swimming competition ever. Where the gladiators of Knox swim bravely against their fellow competitors for the glory of the CAS Cup. But every year there is something missing, something that would throw Knox over the line for victory once again. That is you.
I have a dream that you the crowd will cheer with all your strength and all your might for Knox and its swimmers,
I have a dream that you the crowd will be who our Knox swimmers look up to you in the stands for inspiration and determination
I have a dream that you the crowd will thrive in numbers to the CAS to over power our other competitors.

So this Thursday something will happen, Knox will retake the CAS Cup and all its glory not only thanks to our fierce swimmers but to you, the crowd who will cheer for our swimmers in their times of need. So be there when history is written and to help our mighty swimmers retake the glorious cup!

Martin Luther King Jr - 'I have a dream.'

I am happy to join with you today in what will go down in history as the greatest demonstration for freedom in the history of our nation.

Five score years ago, a great American, in whose symbolic shadow we stand today, signed the Emancipation Proclamation. This momentous decree came as a great beacon light of hope to millions of Negro slaves who had been seared in the flames of withering injustice. It came as a joyous daybreak to end the long night of their captivity.

But one hundred years later, the Negro still is not free. One hundred years later, the life of the Negro is still sadly crippled by the manacles of segregation and the chains of discrimination. One hundred years later, the Negro lives on a lonely island of poverty in the midst of a vast ocean of material prosperity. One hundred years later, the Negro is still languished in the corners of American society and finds himself an exile in his own land. And so we've come here today to dramatize a shameful condition.

In a sense we've come to our nation's capital to cash a check. When the architects of our republic wrote the magnificent words of the Constitution and the Declaration of Independence, they were signing a promissory note to which every American was to fall heir. This note was a promise that all men, yes, black men as well as white men, would be guaranteed the "unalienable Rights" of "Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness." It is obvious today that America has defaulted on this promissory note, insofar as her citizens of color are concerned. Instead of honoring this sacred obligation, America has given the Negro people a bad check, a check which has come back marked "insufficient funds."

But we refuse to believe that the bank of justice is bankrupt. We refuse to believe that there are insufficient funds in the great vaults of opportunity of this nation. And so, we've come to cash this check, a check that will give us upon demand the riches of freedom and the security of justice.

We have also come to this hallowed spot to remind America of the fierce urgency of Now. This is no time to engage in the luxury of cooling off or to take the tranquilizing drug of gradualism. Now is the time to make real the promises of democracy. Now is the time to rise from the dark and desolate valley of segregation to the sunlit path of racial justice. Now is the time to lift our nation from the quicksands of racial injustice to the solid rock of brotherhood. Now is the time to make justice a reality for all of God's children.

It would be fatal for the nation to overlook the urgency of the moment. This sweltering summer of the Negro's legitimate discontent will not pass until there is an invigorating autumn of freedom and equality. Nineteen sixty-three is not an end, but a beginning. And those who hope that the Negro needed to blow off steam and will now be content will have a rude awakening if the nation returns to business as usual. And there will be neither rest nor tranquility in America until the Negro is granted his citizenship rights. The whirlwinds of revolt will continue to shake the foundations of our nation until the bright day of justice emerges.

But there is something that I must say to my people, who stand on the warm threshold which leads into the palace of justice: In the process of gaining our rightful place, we must not be guilty of wrongful deeds. Let us not seek to satisfy our thirst for freedom by drinking from the cup of bitterness and hatred. We must forever conduct our struggle on the high plane of dignity and discipline. We must not allow our creative protest to degenerate into physical violence. Again and again, we must rise to the majestic heights of meeting physical force with soul force.

The marvelous new militancy which has engulfed the Negro community must not lead us to a distrust of all white people, for many of our white brothers, as evidenced by their presence here today, have come to realize that their destiny is tied up with our destiny. And they have come to realize that their freedom is inextricably bound to our freedom.

We cannot walk alone.

And as we walk, we must make the pledge that we shall always march ahead.

We cannot turn back.

There are those who are asking the devotees of civil rights, "When will you be satisfied?" We can never be satisfied as long as the Negro is the victim of the unspeakable horrors of police brutality. We can never be satisfied as long as our bodies, heavy with the fatigue of travel, cannot gain lodging in the motels of the highways and the hotels of the cities. We cannot be satisfied as long as the negro's basic mobility is from a smaller ghetto to a larger one. We can never be satisfied as long as our children are stripped of their self-hood and robbed of their dignity by signs stating: "For Whites Only." We cannot be satisfied as long as a Negro in Mississippi cannot vote and a Negro in New York believes he has nothing for which to vote. No, no, we are not satisfied, and we will not be satisfied until "justice rolls down like waters, and righteousness like a mighty stream."

I am not unmindful that some of you have come here out of great trials and tribulations. Some of you have come fresh from narrow jail cells. And some of you have come from areas where your quest -- quest for freedom left you battered by the storms of persecution and staggered by the winds of police brutality. You have been the veterans of creative suffering. Continue to work with the faith that unearned suffering is redemptive. Go back to Mississippi, go back to Alabama, go back to South Carolina, go back to Georgia, go back to Louisiana, go back to the slums and ghettos of our northern cities, knowing that somehow this situation can and will be changed.

Let us not wallow in the valley of despair, I say to you today, my friends.

And so even though we face the difficulties of today and tomorrow, I still have a dream. It is a dream deeply rooted in the American dream.

I have a dream that one day this nation will rise up and live out the true meaning of its creed: "We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal."

I have a dream that one day on the red hills of Georgia, the sons of former slaves and the sons of former slave owners will be able to sit down together at the table of brotherhood.

I have a dream that one day even the state of Mississippi, a state sweltering with the heat of injustice, sweltering with the heat of oppression, will be transformed into an oasis of freedom and justice.

I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character.

I have a dream today!

I have a dream that one day, down in Alabama, with its vicious racists, with its governor having his lips dripping with the words of "interposition" and "nullification" -- one day right there in Alabama little black boys and black girls will be able to join hands with little white boys and white girls as sisters and brothers.

I have a dream today!

I have a dream that one day every valley shall be exalted, and every hill and mountain shall be made low, the rough places will be made plain, and the crooked places will be made straight; "and the glory of the Lord shall be revealed and all flesh shall see it together."²

This is our hope, and this is the faith that I go back to the South with.

With this faith, we will be able to hew out of the mountain of despair a stone of hope. With this faith, we will be able to transform the jangling discords of our nation into a beautiful symphony of brotherhood. With this faith, we will be able to work together, to pray together, to struggle together, to go to jail together, to stand up for freedom together, knowing that we will be free one day.

And this will be the day -- this will be the day when all of God's children will be able to sing with new meaning:

My country 'tis of thee, sweet land of liberty, of thee I sing.

Land where my fathers died, land of the Pilgrim's pride,

From every mountainside, let freedom ring!

And if America is to be a great nation, this must become true.

And so let freedom ring from the prodigious hilltops of New Hampshire.

Let freedom ring from the mighty mountains of New York.

Let freedom ring from the heightening Alleghenies of Pennsylvania.

Let freedom ring from the snow-capped Rockies of Colorado.

Let freedom ring from the curvaceous slopes of California.

But not only that:

Let freedom ring from Stone Mountain of Georgia.

Let freedom ring from Lookout Mountain of Tennessee.

Let freedom ring from every hill and molehill of Mississippi.

From every mountainside, let freedom ring.

And when this happens, when we allow freedom ring, when we let it ring from every village and every hamlet, from every state and every city, we will be able to speed up that day when all of God's children, black men and white men, Jews and Gentiles, Protestants and Catholics, will be able to join hands and sing in the words of the old Negro spiritual:

                Free at last! Free at last!

                Thank God Almighty, we are free at last!

1. Summarize the thesis of the speech in one sentence.

The thesis of the speech is for all men and women, black and white to have the same rights as each other and that black people should be treated the same as white people

2. Mode of Persuasion? (it is ok to have more than one) Give examples to support your answer/answers.

He uses Logos as one mode of persuasion as he gives detailed evidence from the Declaration of Independence for example "unalienable Rights" of "Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Happiness." 

He also uses Pathos by giving a sense of powerful emotion into his speech by using repetition and metaphors for example "we've come to our nation's capital to cash a check" and "we will not be satisfied until "justice rolls down like waters, and righteousness like a mighty stream."

King also uses Ethos when he refers to himself as he has a dream for example "I have a dream that one day on the red hills of Georgia, the sons of former slaves and the sons of former slave owners will be able to sit down together at the table of brotherhood". 

3. Major techniques (highlight all examples)

Repetition is a major technique used in the speech for example he keeps on uses "I have a dream, inclusive language when he uses "we" which unites the audience, there are also many metaphors within they speech such as "hew out of the mountain of despair a stone of hope".

4. What is the historical context of this speech?

He refers to the Declaration of Independence and uses parts of Abraham Lincoln speech at Gettsburg.

5. Do you feel that this is an effective speech? (answer in a paragraph)

I feel that this is the most effective speech in America's history as it is a momentous turning point in America's history and Martin Luther King says a speech that forever changes their history.