'Is it cruel to keep animals in cages?' Persuasive Naplan Writing

Animals have been around for  millions of years and it has only been in the past hundred years that man kind has kept animals in cages. Over the years animals, have not just become food but have become entertainment at circuses or wildlife shows and we have learned that we can live with animals such as dogs and cats to be our loyal companions. This is why keeping animals in cages is a cruel thing to do.

Over the years, we have learned that animals can be more than just breakfast, lunch and dinner.
Over the years, we have learned that animals can be our life, long companions and we can live together in harmony.
Over the years, we have learned that using animals for our own entertainment is not cruel but it is cruel, 'behind the scenes', to keep them in small, cramped cages with barely any food or water and no mental or physical stimulation.
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Animals are just like us, they eat, sleep and drink like us. They can run, walk and fly like us. They speak a certain language and they all have male and female genders. So why is it that we have to keep these animals, who are just like us in nearly every single way, in cages? How would you feel being stuck in a small, cramped and uncomfortable cage with little food and water and no one to play with or talk to?

There are examples all over the world where animals have been taking from their homes and then stuck in cages until they can be moved to a new home. For example a group of giant pandas in China were taking from their bamboo forest home and taken into captivity for tourists but were never realised until wildlife experts finally took action. By the time that got them out it took years to rehabilitate and breed the pandas so they could go back into the wild.

It is very cruel to keep animals in cages as they are just like us in many ways and like us need to be able to roam free within their own natural habitat. If we keep more and more animals in cages not only will they become extinct the animals will lose their natural way of life from being in a natural habitat to being locked up in cages.

Henry V 'once more unto the breach'

Once more unto the breach, dear friends, once more,
Or close the wall up with our English dead.
In peace there's nothing so becomes a man
As modest stillness and humility,
But when the blast of war blows in our ears,
Then imitate the action of the tiger.
Stiffen the sinews, summon up the blood,
Disguise fair nature with hard-favoured rage.
Then lend the eye a terrible aspect,
Let pry through the portage of the head
Like the brass cannon, let the brow o'erwhelm it
As fearfully as doth a galled rock
O'erhang and jutty his confounded base,
Swilled with the wild and wasteful ocean.
Now set the teeth and stretch the nostril wide,
Hold hard the breath, and bend up every spirit
To his full height. On, on, you noblest English,
Whose blood is fet from fathers of war-proof,
Fathers that like so many Alexanders
Have in these parts from morn till even fought
And sheathed their swords for lack of argument.
Dishonour not your mothers; now attest
That those whom you called fathers did beget you.
Be copy now to men of grosser blood,
And teach them how to war. And you, good yeomen,
Whose limbs were made in England, show us here
The mettle of your pasture; let us swear
That you are worth your breeding- which I doubt not,
For there is none of you so mean and base
That hath not noble lustre in your eyes.
I see you stand like greyhounds in the slips,
Straining upon the start. The game's afoot.
Follow your spirit, and upon this charge
Cry 'God for Harry, England, and Saint George!'

1. Find and Highlight where these techniques are used:

Repetition

Inclusive language

Alliteration

Metaphor

2. Answer the following Questions (use quotes where applicable):

What characteristics does King Henry say are best for men in times of PEACE?

Modest, stillness and humility.

What should men be like in war?

They should be tough and strong in battle and should not be afraid of anything." when the blast of war blows in our ears, then imitate the action of the tiger.Stiffen the sinews, summon up the blood, disguise fair nature with hard-favoured rage."

What does Henry say about the English and their ancestors?

That they have fought many battles with many lives lost "Whose blood is fet from fathers of war-proof"

What does he mean when he says 'Be copy now to men of grosser blood.'?

He means to be like their fathers: strong, brave and noble and win the war.

What is Henry saying you have to become in order to be successful in war?

You have to be like an animal and have no fear.

Othello (Act I sc iii) - Lago

IAGO-


It is merely a lust of the blood and a permission of
the will. Come, be a man. Drown thyself! drown
cats and blind puppies. I have professed me thy
friend and I confess me knit to thy deserving with
cables of perdurable toughness; I could never
better stead thee than now. Put money in thy
purse; follow thou the wars; defeat thy favour with
an usurped beard; I say, put money in thy purse. It
cannot be that Desdemona should long continue her
love to the Moor,-- put money in thy purse,--nor he
his to her: it was a violent commencement, and thou
shalt see an answerable sequestration:--put but
money in thy purse. These Moors are changeable in
their wills: fill thy purse with money:--the food
that to him now is as luscious as locusts, shall be
to him shortly as bitter as coloquintida. She must
change for youth: when she is sated with his body,
she will find the error of her choice: she must
have change, she must: therefore put money in thy
purse. If thou wilt needs damn thyself, do it a
more delicate way than drowning. Make all the money
thou canst: if sanctimony and a frail vow betwixt
an erring barbarian and a supersubtle Venetian not
too hard for my wits and all the tribe of hell, thou
shalt enjoy her; therefore make money. A pox of
drowning thyself! it is clean out of the way: seek
thou rather to be hanged in compassing thy joy than
to be drowned and go without her


Highlight where the following persuasive techniques are used:

Repetition
Alliteration
Extended metaphor

Answer the following questions using quotes where applicable:

What extended metaphor is used in this speech? Is this metaphor positive or negative towards women? Explain.
"Put money in thy purse". It is negative towards women because it shows that Iago only thinks about women as an object and he can make Rodrigo get Desdemona 
How does the metaphor related to Rodrigo becoming more proactive in his pursuit of Desdemona?
He is trying to persuade the villain Lago to stop Othello from being committed to Desdomona.
How does Othello characterise Othello ('the moor')?
By being an undesirable person who Desdemona will eventually change her mind about him.
How does Iago describe Rodrigo being passive? What will he do to himself if he doesn't act?

The Merchant of Venice: Act IV sc i - Portia

Portia: 

The quality of mercy is not strain'd,

It droppeth as the gentle rain from heaven

Upon the place beneath: it is twice blest;

It blesseth him that gives and him that takes: - A person who is giving mercy and a person who is receiving mercy.

'Tis mightiest in the mightiest: it becomes

The throned monarch better than his crown; - If you give mercy you can be better than the King

His sceptre shows the force of temporal power, -          

The attribute to awe and majesty,

Wherein doth sit the dread and fear of kings;

But mercy is above this sceptred (King hold a stick) sway Rule of domination which is the King

It is enthroned in the heart of kings

And earthly power doth then show likest Gods strong than earthly power

And earthly power (Power that you can only do on Earth) doth then show likest God's

When mercy seasons justice. Therefore, Jew,

Though justice be thy plea, consider this,

That, in the course of justice, none of us

Should see salvation: we do pray for mercy;

And that same prayer doth teach us all to render

The deeds of mercy. I have spoke thus much

To mitigate the justice of thy plea;

Which if thou follow, this strict court of Venice

Must needs give sentence 'gainst the merchant there.–Portia is saying if the court takes their pound of flesh then they will be committing jai

Find and highlight these techniques in the speech:

Metaphor
Alliteration 

Repetition

Questions:

How does Portia describe mercy? How important and powerful is it?

She describes mercy as "gentle rain from heaven" It is quite powerful because she is saying that mercy should be given to the merchant.
What can one achieve through mercy?

If you give mercy to others one can achieve forgiveness from God. 

How is religion part of this speech? (You need to do some thinking on this one.

Religion is part of this speech because it refers to Jewish people and other religious people who believe in God. Portia says that God would forgive their sins if they were merciful towards others.

English Speech Draft 3

Lachy Wallis was a hyperactive and cricket loving boy who was just eight years old but just weeks from dying. If he did not receive a liver transplant soon he would die. His own father was being tested as a live liver donor. Then the call came that a liver donor had been found and Lachy would be able to go into an operation almost immediately. The news was miraculous and within a few short weeks his life was saved. If you were given the chance to save a life such as the life of this innocent child wouldn’t you donate your organs?

Every year on average 740 livers are saved by organ and tissue donations. Their life stories are still being written instead of being cut short. I have come to persuade you today that everybody in this room must become an organ donor. The demand for organs significantly surpasses the number of donors everywhere in the world. In 2010, 309 organ donors gave 931 Australians a new chance in life. There are more potential recipients on waiting lists than organ donors, and sadly on average every year 100 people lose their lives because they do not receive an organ or tissue. But there are also many lives that are saved every year thanks to selfless donations.

Many people have doubts about organ donation but don't let your religious views prevent you from doing what you know is right. Many Jewish people are putting aside their Jewish laws of organ donation to donate their organs as medical transplantation methods have improved and many Jewish people know that it is the right thing to do.

Organ and tissue donations save lives every year and Lachy Wallis' story is one of many.
And it is not only the recipients of the organs and tissues but it is also the donors of these precious gifts that have amazing stories to tell. Such as Time Lodder who was nineteen when his life was cut short in a car crash. Tim and his family had already discussed that they would donate their organs when the time came and when it came for Tim no one hesitated. Tim’s donation of his organs saved five lives and although his mother Margaret was saddened by the loss of her child she knew that her son’s wishes were being honoured.

I would like to say that the positives of giving an organ donation far out ways the negatives. Everyday people live are being saved and you can be a part of that. What would you do if you needed a kidney donation, wouldn't you want someone to donate?

Reflection Statement

I chose to take the side of becoming an organ donor as both my parents who are very influential in my life are both organ donors. I also chose my side based on personal and social morals. I feel that it is irrational to go against the idea on not becoming an organ donor and is in today’s society unnatural to not become an organ donor. Becoming an organ donor is also an important issue today and science and medicine are increasingly important in this field of work.

The speech uses many techniques such as rhetorical questions. This technique makes the audience think about what I am saying, it catches their attention and it engages them so not to make the speech boring or to make people day dream. For example ‘If you were given the chance to save a life such as the life of this innocent child wouldn’t you donate your organs?’ Another technique that the speech employs is emotive language. This technique appeals to the audience’s emotion and makes them feel sympathetic about organ donations. It also impacts upon the audience. My speech also incorporates true stories about organ donation and donors. This gives the audience and true fact and some real meaning as it shows the importance of organ donations. I used true stories twice within the speech once with Lachy Wallis and another with Tim Lodder. The speech also uses formal register which demonstrates the importance of the topic and that the speech should be taken seriously. My speech will also have high modality so that I can persuade the audience that my point of view is the right one. My speech will also incorporate pathos throughout it as to persuade the audience by appealing to their emotions and giving a passionate delivery.

When I say my speech I intend to use eye contact so that I engage the audience and maintain their attention. The speed in which I say my speech will be clearly understandable and easy to keep up with. I am not going to use hand gestures throughout my speech as I do not want to distract the audience and I feel it is unnecessary. I will have a clear and great annunciation of words with a loud enough voice to be heard.

Organ Donor Draft Speech 2

Lachy Wallis was a hyperactive and cricket loving boy who was just eight years old but just weeks from dying. If he did not receive a liver transplant soon he would die. His own father was being tested as a live liver donor. Then the call came that a liver donor had been found and Lachy would be able to go into an operation almost immediately. The news was miraculous and within a few short weeks his life was saved. If you were given the chance to save a life such as the life of this innocent child wouldn’t you donate your organs?

Every year on average 740 lives are saved by organ and tissue donations. Their life stories are still being written instead of being cut short. I have come to persuade you today that everybody in this room must become an organ donor. The demand for organs significantly surpasses the number of donors everywhere in the world. There are more potential recipients on waiting lists than organ donors, and sadly on average every year 100 people lose their lives because they do not receive an organ or tissue. But there are also many lives that are saved every year thanks to selfless donations.

Many people have doubts about organ donation but don't let your religious views prevent you from doing what you know is right. Many Jewish people are putting aside their
problems that occur within organ donations can be stopped by you

 
 Organ and tissue donations save lives every year and Lachy Wallis' story is one of many.
And it is not only the recipients of the organs and tissues but it is also the donors of these precious gifts that have amazing stories to tell. 

To sum up I would like to say that the positives of giving an organ donation far out ways the negatives. Everyday people live are being saved and you can be a part of that. What would you do if you needed a kidney donation, wouldn’t you want someone to donate?